Friday, May 11, 2012

Chapter 2 slightly revised

I made a few small but significant changes to this chapter. It doesn't change the story in any way, so you don't have to read this one if you've already read the previous version, but if you're reading Chapter 2 for the first time, read this one.


Chapter 2. Don’t Get Swept Away!

Too distracted by Annie’s avian leap to jump from the plane properly, Smith’s fall was more like that of a tortoise. He barely cleared the floats on the plane, and afterward just kind of plunked into the water.
His feet touched the bottom and he pushed his way back up. He broke the surface just in time to see the sea-colored seaplane crash into the sea. It didn’t explode as Smith had warned of, instead sliding rather anticlimactically into the water. The downward angle of its nose caused it to flip over itself and eventually tear in two before it sunk. It didn’t look half so dangerous as Smith had thought it might, and in fact it even looked survivable. Smith shrugged at this, then remembered that he had just seen a man murdered on that plane, then remembered his own circumstances of being stranded on an exotic island, then remembered the burden of the soaking leather jacket on his shoulders. After remembering all this, he remarked to himself, “At least the water feels cool.”
After catching sight of Annie making her way to shore, Smith followed suit. The breaststroke, because he knew no others. And even that he was a little shifty on.
“Good thing you brought that raincoat!” he called out to her as she stood up in the shallow water, soaked and dripping, and began walking up to the beach.
She paid him a withering glance. After that, she ignored him.
As he also rose to his feet, he noticed for the first time a sign, posted straight into the sand like a legendary sword. While surely no legendary sword, its placement and, frankly, its oddity, suggested a similar significance.
Annie didn’t seem to give the sign a second, nor even a first look. But upon drawing parallel to it, she flumped down on the sun-beaten sand like a cat in the sun. Smith, halting before the sign, did give it a single look, and would have given it a second but he didn’t need to. His first look was long, for the words on the sign perplexed him:

Welcome to Rainswept Isle!
(Don’t get swept away!)

After the words perplexed him, the very existence of the sign did the same. Then he, too, flumped down on the sand on the opposite side of the sign from Annie.
“What do you think that sign means?” he asked conversationally.
“Haven’t the mistiest...” she said.
Smith felt that suddenly their roles had reversed, and quickly withdrew back into his calloused self. He would offer no more attempts at small talk. And, thinking this, he remembered that he hated small talk. This, with a quiet “Hmph!”, reinforced in his mind his own character, and he remembered his place in the story: the sequel of which he was apparently the star. Then he sighed, and, as was his wont, frowned.
Both were catching their breath, lying in the sun. After several minutes, Smith sat up. “Hey,” he said in a gruffer voice than before. “Hey, you’ll want to take that raincoat off if you want to dry properly.”
She turned her head to look at him and shook her head like a little girl.
“What, are you naked under there or something? You really should take it off.”
Still lying in the sand, she rolled over, away from him.
He shrugged, then started to take off his jacket.
Then, interrupting him, she rolled back over and sat up too. In this position she asked a very genuine question: “Who are you?”

“A prisoner,” he said. “I’ll tell you the rest later.”
He had forgotten about taking the jacket off and, leaving it on, instead stood up. After dusting some of the wet sand from his person he indicated the jungle behind them with a nod of his head.
“Come on,” he said.
“Come on what?” she said, a bit of fear in her voice.
“We should go,” he said, again indicating the wall of jungle.
“We’re going to go in there?” she said, quite a bit more fear, or maybe just hesitation, or maybe just raw, shocked incredulity in her voice.
Or maybe it was just quite a bit more fear. The jungle did indeed look thick, dark, and foreboding.
“It looks so...thick, dark, and foreboding,” she said as if she were overhearing us (which she might have been).
“Well, that’s where our gear is. And I would think that to be our first priority. Then, after that, we can determine what we need to do.” He started making his way towards the jungle.
“Will we...will we be safe in there?” she asked after him.
“No,” Smith said.
She stood still, waiting for him to say anything more, but he just continued walking up the shore, saying nothing.
“What are you here on this island for, anyway?” she asked, now following him.
“Apparently some grand adventure,” Smith said. “That’s what it seems, anyway. I’ve been led into these types of things before.” Then, again in a gruffer voice as he heard himself talking too much, “Come on. You’re dry enough. Let’s go.”
They passed through the brush and into the shade of the canopy.
“Say, do you remember even getting on that plane?” Smith remarked, stepping over a portruding root. “Because I’m not sure if I do.”

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Billy Huggs, future Head of C Toon in Commandant Amon Dem’s League of Most Noble Guardsmen and Henchfellows, hated most other men.
It wasn’t that he was bitter and gay. In fact, it was quite the opposite of that. He loved women and hated to see men be hurtful to them. It was a man’s responsibility, he thought (and asserted often), to use their superior physical strength given them by nature to protect women who could not otherwise protect themselves. (He had originally thought this to be all women, until he witnessed for himself the work of that female assassin who’d been hired by the big boss a couple of years ago. He couldn’t ever remember what her name was, but he did remember that it sounded like a man’s name. Regardless, her handiwork forced open his mind and recalibrated his perception of women, or at least the possibilities of women.)
At heart, Billy Huggs was sweet (making him, in layman’s terms, a sweetheart), and always dreamed of being with a girl. Not of doing anything in particular with her, just being with her. Being close. And her wanting that. Wanting to be with him.
Billy Huggs had a problem with self-esteem, and rightfully so. He was dreadfully ugly, and good at not very much at all. It was because of his emotional condition (which shouldn’t be called a disorder, as it was completely logical) that he never felt worthy even to be in the same room as a girl, let alone hold one in his arms (though this was his deepest wish). Carnal desires were never at the forefront of his mind, probably because he knew he could never get that far anyway. It was more than he deserved, he knew. He didn’t want much. Just...affection. Holding hands, kissing, and, yes, hugs. Hugs and holds, and then kisses and maybe...maybe even caresses. He treasured in his heart two words that he never could bring himself to say out loud, for they were far too much to ask for, but were in fact his greatest goals in life: cuddling and snuggling. These words were as sacred to him as anything could be. He dreamed of saving a woman and then holding her, making her feel protected and safe. That, he knew, was his purpose in life.
His sensitivity towards women did not go unnoticed by his fellow guards. Practically all his “colleagues” fell under that category of men whom he hated: partly because of his perception of how they treated and thought of women, and partly because they all teased him so much about it. “Tease” was a mild word; in fact, he was roundly abused by them on a regular basis. And it didn’t help things that his last name was “Huggs.”
The only way he really went on was by knowing, deep down in his sweet little heart, that he was right about these things, and they were wrong. Indignation, self-righteousness, the higher plane: he rode standing up on the skull of the tallest Clydesdale.
And someday he knew he would find her. Whoever she was.
But how could he ever find a woman when there seemed to be only piggish men on this blasted island?
This was constantly in the back of his mind as he did his guard duties. It should be said that there was something about him he considered most excellent, and so it was pursued with the highest level of priority: his work as a guard, particularly in this jungle. He knew the jungle terrain and topography with exceeding precision and had an innate sense of direction. His tracking abilities even rivaled that of the native tribes on the island. He was an exceptional guard, and he knew it.
This, however, as opposed to his feelings on women, did go unnoticed by his fellow guards, although not by Commandant Amon Dem. At least he thought. What else could it mean when Amon Dem, the beloved Head Hermano, sent him out to perform scouting duties so often, to patrol the Outer Invisible Magnetic Super Perimeter? No, Billy Huggs knew his work was valued and his abilities appreciated...and that his skills in the jungle totally made up for the fact that he had never fired a gun in his life, and was scared out of his mind to do so.

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Thick, yes, dark, yes, but foreboding? Not as much, but only because they were already inside and among the alien nature. It was absolutely beautiful, what with the impossibly tall trees and the tropical ivy that wrapped around them, climbing to the very top in its eventual goal to suck the lifeblood out of the tree and use its hollow, skeletal remains as its permanent home; the stones and boulders blanketed with moss, which had clearly never rolled a day in their life; colorful flowers with shapes and forms that could easily be carnivrous; and the feeling that they were surrounded on all sides by pure life, albeit life that was all about destroying its fellow life for its own selfish purposes, putting Ayn Rand to shame. The soil they stepped on was dark and rich, soft beneath their feet, full of decomposed flora and fauna. A plethora of bird cries could be heard echoing in the branches above, never letting the jungle trekkers forget they were not alone. Butterflies fluttered past, alighting on flowers the size of your head that looked like they could swallow your head. Mosquitos and other bugs swarmed in nearly invisible clouds with a low but incessant buzzing; however, they didn’t attack either Smith or Annie, for they needed to look handsome and adorable, respectively, for the story to work.
Despite the beauty and splendor of the given prose, however, neither Smith nor Annie really took much time to notice. Smith walked far ahead of her, and with such purpose and lack of hesitation that one could easily surmise he had been through such environs before. Annie, too, surprisingly enough, after a few glimpses around, didn’t seem to care. She seemed to be paying more attention to Smith, and keeping up with his determined pace than taking in the myriad life around her.
It turned out not to matter much that Annie’s raincoat hadn’t fully dried off on the sunny beach, because once inside the jungle the humidity kicked in. It felt like a very effective sauna, or like helping your brother move out of his house in Alabama on a summer’s day with no air conditioning just the two of you. Besides the humidity, sweat was also piling up on them. But like with the mosquitos, it did not affect either of their physical attractiveness.
“You said you were a prisoner,” she said after a particularly long bit of silence. “What did you mean by that?”
“You’ll see soon enough,” he grunted without looking at her. And then, softly, to himself, “It’s only a matter of time.”
“Wha-what are you doing here, then? Are you running away from something?”
“I already told you. I’m visiting family.”
“An escaped prisoner---”
“Who said I had escaped?”
“---traveling to a tropical island filled with smugglers---”
“By the way, how do you know that?”
“---to visit family members.”
They both stopped in their tracks and stared at each other. A brief silence punctuated the exchange. Then they heard a bird cry that sounded more like a pterodactyl’s shriek. It helped break the silence. One of the many uses of dinosaurs. Another use will be shown later on.
“Well I’m glad we’ve settled that,” Smith finally said, turning away. “What a story, huh?”
“Actually,” said Annie, in a voice as if to herself, “that IS quite a story.”
“I also asked a question,” Smith said, pushing a jungle fern out of the way to pass through it. “But I’ll repeat it: how do you know there are smugglers on this island?”
The fern swung back and hit Annie in the face.
“Um,” she started, flinching, “My sister told me.”
“So you have family here too, huh?” Smith smirked. “Sounds like a helluva true story.”
“As true as yours,” she snapped back, “Mr. Ruggles Smith!”
She tripped over a root.
Smith smirked again. “Fair enough,” he said.
Literally out of nowhere, they came upon an open patch of ground that led up a slight slope to a ravine. And “literally” is meant literally: it did not exist before they got there. Before they came upon it, it resided in the same place as the passengers in the background of the Ad Nihilum, wherever that is now.
“So your name isn’t really Ruggles Smith?” she said, catching her breath.
Smith glowered at her and turned aside, staring into the depths of the green, green jungle. Then he sat down on a moss-covered log.
“Of course it isn’t. Who would name their son Ruggles? That’s not the point,” he said, shaking his head slowly.
“What’s the point then?” she asked very honestly.
“Fine then,” he said, a little exasperated. “I’ll show you what the point is. See that rickety old wooden bridge over there? That goes across this ravine?”
She looked. “Yeah,” she said. Then she blinked, and looked again. “But wait. That wasn’t there a minute ago.”
“You’re beginning to see already,” Smith said. “Now go walk across it.”
“Why?” she said suspiciously.
“I’m showing you,” he said, a slight growl in his voice, the kind of growl housecats emit when they’re held too long.
“It looks dangerous. What if I fall?”
“I can guarantee you you’ll be fine. You’re with me. That’s all you need to know.”
“Oh, big macho man then, is it?”
He smiled grimly at her but said nothing. He again indicated the bridge with a nod of his head. Her face then showed a hint of fright.
“You’re sure I’ll be fine?”
“I’m sure.”
“Okay...” she said timidly, and turned toward the bridge.
She took two long steps then turned back again, as if confirming he was sure about the whole thing. He simply nodded encouragingly, as if to a child. When she reached the bridge she made as if to turn around again, but stopped herself. As she took her first step, he stood from the log he was sitting on.
For the first few steps across, everything was fine. Then, as she stepped on the correct plank, she looked back at him once again, confused.
At that instant, the ropes connecting the bridge to the near side of the ravine snapped.
She screamed. He screamed too. Very different kinds of screams, both in terms of pitch and intent.
“ANNIE!” was what he impulsively cried as he put his muscular frame into motion.
She clung to the wooden planks as the bridge fell, swinging against the far side of the ravine. She even managed to hang on as it slammed against the face of the cliff. Now, as she clung desperately, she continued to scream, but in short little bursts.
Smith, already moving, reached the edge of the ravine and launched himself as far and high as he could go, nowhere near enough to clear the gap, out into nothing—
—and grabbed hold of a vine hanging down from a tree, a vine that had escaped the Smith’s notice before the moment when he launched from the edge. It didn’t matter that he hadn’t seen it before; he knew it would be there.
He swung heroically across, and let go at the other end, landing hard on the ravine’s edge. Quite impossibly he caught himself and held on, digging his fingers into the rock. When they slipped they found a curiously convenient plant with thick roots to grab onto. Grunting and with teeth clenched, he pulled himself up and onto solid ground.
Now successfully on the other side, he dashed over to the fallen bridge, where Annie’s screams had died down into soft little whimpering cries.
“Can you climb up at all?” he asked as he lowered himself to the ground and reached down to her.
She didn’t respond verbally, only with wide, terrified, angry eyes. But she did as he suggested, and started climbing up the fallen bridge like a ladder, each wooden slat a rung. Soon she was close enough to reach his outstretched hands. He grasped onto her, and helped pull her up the rest of the way. With a final heave they spilled upwards, onto the jungle ground, and together they lay there, once more catching their breath.
“What the HELL was that?” she uttered in a combination of amazement and absolute fury. “Did you KNOW that was going to happen?”
In that moment he thought he saw a glint of something else in Annie’s eyes that wasn’t her. Like when she swan-dived out of the Ad Nihilum. The Annie he had so recently come to know wouldn’t curse like that....
He decided to ignore it, and then answered her question directly.
“In a short answer, yes.”
“And you still sent me over it?”
“If I wasn’t here, it wouldn’t have happened. I was here, and so it did. It couldn’t have happened without me here to rescue you.”
Her glare, heavy breathing and angry eyes really weren’t all that attractive to Smith. Good thing, too. He didn’t want this situation to blossom into anything else. He worried about that possibility more than anything else right now. She seemed the type to make a big deal over being rescued from certain death.
“Fine. I want the long answer then,” she said. “Who are you?”
He sighed, opened his mouth a few times, trying to start, then shut it before saying, “This is the world I live in,” he said. “Governed by cliché after cliché. Trope after trope. I’ve seen myself in more movies than you’ve probably seen at all. I am a hero, and there’s nothing I can do about it.”
She stared, as if waiting for more. But that’s all he offered.
“So…” she said slowly, “What’s your real name?”
“You still want that?”
She folded her arms and nodded.
“My real name…is Jack McDowell.”
Just as had happened when he gave her his fake name, a sudden stream of laughter burst out of her, and at once she clapped her hand over her mouth. But that did little to suppress the giggles.
“Yeah,” he said dryly. “It looks like you understand.”

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“We want Huggs all around...the perimeter,” current head of C Toon, Tommy Blast, had told him.
Billy Huggs had detected a joke in that line somewhere, something sarcastic, or maybe derogatory...but he couldn’t tell, because the faces of Tommy Blast and the rest of C Toon were as straight as Tom Jones himself. After eyeing them all, still a bit wary, he nodded, and without a word, grabbed his forever unfired AK47 and left the base, going out into the jungle on his usual route.

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“Tell me if you somehow spot a big column of smoke coming up from the ground before me,” Smith --- no, Jack --- said to Annie. “I should warn you: the only reason I consented to tell you who and what I am is because I feel like I have to take on that identity again for now. I realized that the second I saw that quiet conversation Eli Noyce had with the pilot, whatever his name was.”
“Hilti, I think.”
“That sounds right. No doubt we’ll meet him again on this island before we leave it. And I am going to leave it, as soon as possible. You can stay here all you want, but as soon as I’ve done what I came here to do, I’m finding my way out of here.”
“And what have you come here to do?” Annie said in a more interested voice.
Jack did not reply. Another leafy branch swung back in her face.

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After an hour of patrolling the perimeter line, which was itself a good half an hour’s hike outside the actual compound, Billy Huggs happened to pass through a clear patch of ground where he could see the sky. He stood there for a few minutes, taking in the direct sunshine. It made him happy. For some reason, he wanted to eat an orange.
And then he caught sight of the reason he wanted that fruit in particular: thick orange smoke was rising in the distance, probably about 300 meters north of where he was right now. His thirst to prove his capabilities superseded his fear of perhaps having to fire his gun, and without a third thought, he ventured away from the Outer Invisible Magnetic Super Perimeter, north towards that pillar of smoke.
(His second thought was that he still really wanted an orange.)

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Jack, still far ahead of Annie, could smell smoke. It reminded him of Christmas.
“I smell smoke!” Annie said, sniffing strong sniffs. “It reminds me of Christmas!”
Jack turned back, frowning, always frowning. “Strange,” he said. “I had that same thought.”
“I think it’s like a fire in the fireplace,” said Annie. “That’s what I associate it with. Do smoke flares usually smell like that?”
“I’m not sure,” said Jack, still frowning. He didn’t see the look of adoration in Annie’s eyes at that moment. If he had, he might not have seen what was behind her, and done what he was about to do. And it also may have ended up killing her.

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Billy Huggs saw the man and woman from across the shallow ravine. He stayed in the shadows, behind some foliage, just watching them. The man wore a black leather jacket and the woman a long gray raincoat.
He had also spotted the orange smoke column; it billowed up at the head of the ravine, a good fifty yards down the way behind a boulder. Undoubtedly it was their destination. But he didn’t think about that. He was focused on them. They were together. A man and woman, alone in the jungle. Who or what else could they possibly need? They had each other. How dare anyone who had love want anything else? Selfish people who don’t realize how good they have it.
They were talking, but Billy Huggs couldn’t make out their words. Why weren’t they holding hands? How could they be together and not be holding hands? If only they could know how much Billy Huggs had been deprived! How desperate he was for even just the mere touch of a girl! If they knew how much their relationship was truly worth, they would definitely be holding hands.
And there was the movement! The man was reaching toward her! Billy Huggs was about to burst into tears of envy and pain---!
But the emotion changed on a dime. The man wasn’t reaching out to hold her hand, but to grab it, and jerk her away! The man yelled something, an exclamation, just as his fingers closed around her wrist. Once in his grip, the man dragged the woman several yards away.
At the sight of such violence, of such domestic depravity, Billy Huggs moved forward, out of the shadows. Not to do violence; in fact, he had forgotten the automatic he held in his sweaty, slippery hands.
“HEY!” he yelled across the ravine, his face enraged with indignation.
The man and woman looked up and saw him, and even across the ravine, the whites of their eyes were visible.
“Come on!” the man shouted to the woman, and they took off running in the direction of the smoke.
Without thinking much, Billy Huggs took up the chase, suspecting the smoke to be their destination. Given the raw vacancy in his mind, Billy Huggs continued to forget he was carrying a gun, and consequently that he might look very frightening to unarmed, “innocent” people. He didn’t want to attack the man, just teach him to not take women for granted! And maybe the woman might see how brave and kind he was, how he could protect her and treat her as she deserved to be treated...and maybe she’d appreciate Billy Huggs for the sweet spirit he housed inside....
He ran parallel to them along the ravine as they zig-zagged through trees on the other side. He wondered why they were running so fast. Did they think he was going to hurt them?
The large boulder at the head of the ravine separated him from the smoke. As both parties reached this point, Billy Huggs started to round the boulder, and at last they saw each other up close.
The man in the leather jacket hurled himself at a spot just next to the smoke while the woman stayed a distance away, yelling something inarticulate. Billy Huggs was only twenty feet away when he realized what was at the base of the smoke: the man was fumbling through a large pack, out of which he soon procured a black, shiny, steel revolver.
Billy Huggs stared on in horror. The sweat on his hands, from the jungle, from the chase, from his nervousness with guns, slipped on his assault rifle as he tried to raise it to defend himself, but it was too late. The man had already cocked and aimed.
And it was there poor Billy Huggs met his end. If he had died five seconds earlier, he would have died with a dream in his heart. As it was, it was more like a nightmare come true. Then he woke up from his nightmare, into the great beyond.

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“Okay, that does NOT smell like Christmas anymore,” Jack said, coughing with his face scrunched up as he dragged his and Annie’s gear far away from the smoke.
Annie just stared wide-eyed at the body of Billy Huggs.
“Uh...Jack...you just...you just shot a guy,” she said with a whimper.
“Oh, don’t worry about that,” Jack said, sniffing and shaking his head to clear the smoke and acrid smell from his face and lungs. “Henchmen have no souls.”
It took Annie a few seconds to register what he said.
“Wait, what?”
“They’re not real people,” Jack said matter-of-factly. “They don’t have feelings, they don’t have desires, they don’t have life stories, and they don’t have core personalities other than that of doing exactly what they’re told to do. They’re just empty tools in the hands of whoever’s using them. So what this means is that somewhere on this island is a villain. And I intend to find out who he is and where he’s at.”
“But, but, but if he has no soul,” she said, pointing at the body of Billy Huggs, “why didn’t he shoot us?”
Jack shrugged. “He probably wasn’t very good at his job.”
Annie just stood there, a strange listlessness in her eyes.
“No doubt we’ll need Wrench here for the rest of our adventure,” Jack said, holding up his revolver.
“So you think we’ll be in danger, then?” she said.
“We’ve already been in danger, sweet strawberry lips.”
Immediately Jack closed his eyes and mouthed some angry words at himself for what he had just done. The words had come to his mind far too easily. He needed stronger safeguards against the gods. And because his eyes were closed, he didn’t see Annie’s reaction: a blushing, gushing, open-mouthed smile, eyes bright as Rudolph’s nose that seemed not to see the bloody corpse upon the ground just a few feet away.
“Thank you,” she said, glowing, “for pulling me away from that snake earlier.”

2 comments:

  1. Again I loved the fun voice the story is told in and the characters. It was a sad bit of irony with Huggs though. Also, the line about Huggs and the perimeter was hilarious.

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  2. This chapter does an excellent job of setting up the henchmen irony. The pacing to and timing of Jack's "reveal" about henchmen and their souls was very well done and countered nicely with Billy Huggs's actions. If there was one thing that drew me out of the flow of the story, I'd say it was the amount of parentheses, particularly at the beginning when we first meet Billy Huggs. They were incredibly amusing, but I felt that many didn't need to be in parentheses. I would keep the comments (and even leave some in parentheses) but try to incorporate them more into the prose. Other than that, this really drew me into the characters and setting. And again, good foreshadowing. Awesome job.

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